fic fic fic. pansy/bellatrix, post war, NC-17. and i mean it this time. I think.
the last remaining death eaters meet their end.
I wanted to love her.
With each sweet tremor that wracked her body, each husky moan ripped from her lips, I felt my frozen core thaw the slightest bit more. She tasted of candy, though I never saw her consume a scrap of sugar - a hallucination, brought about by the childish curls in her cotton candy hair, the strawberry hue of her slick folds. Addictive, that taste, like the first fragment of power to dissolve on my tongue.
Power brought me here. Power brought them to my door. An addictive and fatal drug.
Our milky arms lay side by side, the same black stain marring our tender skin; legs entwined, sweaty and hot, and I wanted more than anything to love her. I reached deep within myself in desperation, prodded my heart and found it black and lifeless. Killed - no, willingly offered for the slaughter - but then I didn’t know, young and foolish and full of misguided lust, that she would one day come along.
She writhed, pleaded for more. One more fix as they battered down my door, swarmed around the windows, ravenous wolves demanding their final taste of blood. For the deranged parents. For the lost loved ones. And I couldn’t understand their fury, because I had never loved.
I plunged my tongue deep inside her one last time, devouring each whimper and mewl because I knew they were the last, devouring each sweet drop she offered me. I sunk my teeth into her thigh, watched tiny rosebuds bloom on the silky flesh. And she screamed and screamed, my own name reverberating off the walls in a nightmarish echo, and I knew she loved me.
And I wanted to love her.
The door caved in. Footsteps pounded through the halls, up the stairs, across the landing. She never even knew - lost in a delirious haze, she simply stared up at me with glazed eyes - and I knew I could not love her. But I could save her.
Grasping the wand at my bedside, I offered her all that I had left to give. All that I had ever known.
Avada Kedavra.
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November 23 2003, 08:09:57 UTC 8 years ago
November 22 2003, 21:36:46 UTC 8 years ago
Also, I've taken a gander at your livejournal and it seems like we have a lot in common.
November 23 2003, 08:10:21 UTC 8 years ago
and thank you so much. i'm all about the characters.
November 22 2003, 21:51:59 UTC 8 years ago
And I wanted to love her.
The door caved in. Footsteps pounded through the halls, up the stairs, across the landing. She never even knew - lost in a delirious haze, she simply stared up at me with glazed eyes - and I knew I could not love her. But I could save her.
and that's where i had to stop highlighting "favorite bits", because i'd end up highlighting the entire ficlet. this was so *right*. <3
November 23 2003, 08:10:48 UTC 8 years ago
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November 22 2003, 23:53:33 UTC 8 years ago
With each sweet tremor that wracked her body, each husky moan ripped from her lips, I felt my frozen core thaw the slightest bit more.
I absolutely loved that line. Frankly, it's nearly the first line, but phew... there is just something about it.
Great work!
November 23 2003, 08:11:57 UTC 8 years ago
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November 23 2003, 08:34:48 UTC 8 years ago
of course, 'perfect' doesn't hurt either :B
so many thank yous.
November 23 2003, 08:45:12 UTC 8 years ago
The whole piece was elegant and sensual, and what an ending!
November 23 2003, 08:49:22 UTC 8 years ago
okay, okay, keep going if you must ^_____~
just kidding :D what i meant to say, of course, was thank you thank you.
November 23 2003, 11:02:44 UTC 8 years ago
November 23 2003, 12:27:33 UTC 8 years ago
... and that's good, i hope? ^__~
November 23 2003, 11:18:27 UTC 8 years ago
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November 23 2003, 13:25:15 UTC 8 years ago
Just... the imagery is amazing, and I agree with
Addictive, that taste, like the first fragment of power to dissolve on my tongue.
Possibly this is my favourite line, because I just think it sums up your writing style.
November 23 2003, 13:38:54 UTC 8 years ago
the endings have to be at least reasonable for me. i've tossed out whole fics that i loved because i couldn't come up with a good ending. i think you need to kick someone in the ass on their way out the door, or why have them come in at all? if that made any sense. :B
November 23 2003, 16:32:58 UTC 8 years ago
On the other hand, that was also exactly the way I wanted to end my Bella/Luna -- but it's okay. I'll figure something out.
o r0x0rz! *♥*
November 23 2003, 16:36:06 UTC 8 years ago
i'd forgotten they were your otp. well, it was my pleasure ^__^
November 29 2003, 11:56:25 UTC 8 years ago
I will begin by saying I love dark fic, as long as it doesn't go too far (for me, that is, of course). But this was right in the area I like it.
Fav Line: Grasping the wand at my bedside, I offered her all that I had left to give. All that I had ever known.
The last line was also very powerful. In short, I really liked the story. Someone else pointed out, and I must agree 100% that you have a gift for writing wildly different characters. It is fun to read the wide spectrum of your work!
November 29 2003, 12:44:34 UTC 8 years ago
June 3 2004, 21:08:36 UTC 7 years ago
I liked this quite a bit. Bellatrix hallucinating and not knowing quite what is real really works perfectly with her character. I love, love, love the ending. It's touching and kind in a way that's not-quite-right and perfectly Bellatrix.
September 17 2007, 16:00:10 UTC 4 years ago
I loved the way it's written, and I loved the entire idea of their last minutes, Pansy trying to love here, saving her... Avada Kedavra. This really knocked my off my feet.